We have been reading and reading this last weeks essays and they are fantastic! We are coming close to the end of our Weekly “Three Sentence Essay” Scholarship run! So be sure to write those last few.
This weeks winning essay comes from Richard Nolan!
Here is the winning essay: If I could fix one thing about my school, it would be the apathy, the sense of failure, and the lackadaisical attitude toward education. These emotions flow from everyone, not just students. This failure to inspire, to encourage, and to stretch ability that has brought us to the edge of the pit.
Here is a little more about our winner:
I’m a military history nut and a soccer referee (since I was 12). I read books constantly, and own a small library. I own 5 armies, and play with them on weekends with other grown men. I’ve been described as exuberant, intelligent, and bizarre. I’m also overwhelmingly confident and headstrong, and relish adversity. I love trivia and debate. I follow no set political standard, however I lean toward conservative. I enjoyed chemistry more than any other science I’ve taken or am taking. I have no idea what life holds in store.
Here are the runner up essays:
Janice Wright: Change one thing about my school? That’s easy; I would change the public view of my school, how the community, neighboring schools, public officials and even parents see our school. With a predisposed opinion of us, no one can see the good in our students, and the strength in our programs.
Mary Pochatko: Were you to waltz through the halls of Greenville High School, I know you you would either gag or pass out. This is because our school has a different stench for each hallway, 7th & 8th grade is eau de chicken soup and gymnasium is essence of rubber. You guessed it, I would change my school’s scent.
Nickie McLaughlin: Schools need adults who care.No one seems to reach out to us very often.Everyday I see students who fall and dont know how to get up on their own because of family or community.We need the adults who aren’t just lecturers; but who are people.It takes a village to raise a child and we are the future.
Scott Koogle: If I could fix one thing, it would not be the lack of girls, the lack of air conditioning, or the lack of SmartBoards in every room. It would not be the massive loads of homework or the challenging grading scale. I would make every student honest, for integrity is what really defines a school.
Seema Patel: When I walk the halls of my school, I immediately begin to feel as though the life is being sucked out of my body. My legs feel heavy, my thoughts become cloudy, and my energy reduces to one molecule of ATP. If the halls in my school had more stimulating colors or murals, my days would be livelier.
Niki Patel: If I could fix one thing about my school, I would change the way our cafeteria disposes of excess food. The leftover food from lunch is thrown out everyday, when it could instead be given to the Crossroads Mission. We could feed more hungry families and make a difference in the community.
George Flores: Many are uncertain about their future because of their undiscovered passion. School must offer a broader spectrum of opportunities for new discovery with more school activities and clubs with deeper insight on academic topics; producing students with passionate desire, becoming who they want to be.
Michael Valentino: If I could fix one thing about my school it would be the directors for the musicals. I have a voice of an angel but they don’t seem to think so. All they do is sit there, yell “NEXT”, and get a rather large person to carry me off the stage.
Anjuli Das: I would eradicate our obsession with scores. We are given prizes and grade raises for scoring well on the standardized tests; our teachers are required to wear pins inscribed with the school’s goal score for this year. I am being defined in numbers — as Zinch would say, I am more than a test score.
Remember we are judging the essays based on the essay and your Zinch Profile! So be updating those profiles!